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Journal Entry: Fri Jul 20, 2012, 5:55 PM
Vacation's Over

So I know we have been a little scarce, but this week we've been on vacation. The house we were staying in advertised for internet… little did we know it was dial up. So, rather than frustrate myself over the lack of a connection, I've just forgone the internet for the past several days. But this, on the eve of my return to Washington/home, I feel the need to visit a couple of the places I have been neglecting in the crazy summer that I've experienced.

I'll also need to hit up the Sefall site. Update my goings on there.

That being said, I'm looking for some stories to read and critique to get back into the swing of things. Let me know if you have any suggestions.

[ Artheeria ]



Resolutions

:snowflake: Write everyday.
:snowflake: Read some everyday.
:snowflake: Exercise more and eat healthier.
:snowflake: Manage time better, to include time for Aion & Skyrim.
:snowflake: Maintain garden this summer.
:snowflake: Practice drawing.
Artheeria -- And possibly - maybe - for once - tentatively - plan to finish NaNoWriMo.


To Do

:bulletwhite: Write!
:bulletwhite: Complete the Orreyad racial template.
:bulletwhite: Color ~Susurratrix's picture of Zimpar and Zipartas.
:bulletwhite: Finish picture of Hork Bajir.

:snowflake:MENTORING/PARTNERSHIP:snowflake:
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  • Playing: Aion
  • Drinking: Water

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*SicilianValkyrie Mar 25, 2013   General Artist
Thanks for watching!
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=star-blazer Feb 10, 2013  Professional Writer
Congratulations! :squee:

Your beautiful work Light in the Darkness has been selected and featured for my "Lit. Pick of the Day" today! It will be featured for 24 hours on my page and in a news article with all February's picks at the end of the month.

Thank you for your stunning contribution to the literature community! Keep writing and best wishes!
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*Ferrilonver Dec 31, 2012  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Happy New Year! :hug:
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~OfGamingAndManga Aug 9, 2012  Student General Artist
HIIII!
*totally random comment is random*
But the curiosity is killing me, so... I'd like to ask who the people in yo avatar are :iconpervyxerxesplz:
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:icondarkbullet777:
Hey Chika! long time no chat! :D I can't remember clearly but i do believe i owed you some art of Norraimund and Assirra, but it was SO long ago that i can't remember D8
and i can't find it in my notes.
and its literally been YEARS... xDDD
aside from that stoof, how's things been? =3
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~Sefall Aug 1, 2012  Student Writer
Hello, hello! And yes, it has been quite awhile. If you owed me anything, I don't remember it. :giggle: I think that means you're off the hook. Nice to see you around though! No kidding on the years.

Things have been interesting here and I'm looking for more inspiration for writing. What about you?

:heart: Artheeria
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:icondarkbullet777:
things have been hecka crazy over here @A@ got into college, then left cause math class sucked and i wasn't very good at it and i was homesick.

came back home, more crazy, moved out of parents house, lost job that wasn't paying well anyways, and now i art for money xD;
its balls when i can't find the inspiration to draw anything X.x
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~Sefall Aug 2, 2012  Student Writer
Well at least you're still doing art! :o I wuv your arts so so much.

And things always pick up, eh? :3

:heart: Artheeria
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Hello!:iconyaayplz:
Happy [early] birthday!
May all of your wishes come true - today and always!
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~Sefall Jul 18, 2012  Student Writer
Thank you so very much. :3

:heart: Artheeria
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